September 8, 2012
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apples
#whim sh 60. Write a POEM using a quote from another work. I’m feeling very biblical, don’t you know. But it’s NOT something you’ll be wanting to read at your prayer meeting. It’s a happy birthday poem for dear adamswomanfell. (Are these enough clues for you all?)
He laid her down upon the altar
slowly removing each article
which covered her delicious body,
piece by piece,
inhaling the fragrance of her skin
enraptured by the visage before him.
And when she was bare before him,
blushing and shy, yet brazen-
knowing the look in his eyes-
he took her in.
First his eyes capturing every detail,
then his tongue tracing a path
from her soft lips to sweet neck
nuzzling that spot behind her ear
that he knew would make her his.
Then his tongue slowly sliding down
to the roundness of her breasts,
circular motion ever inward
until he discovered tight peaks-
delicious peaks that tasted of heaven.
Gentle nibbles led the knowledge
which he required
and he followed the scent
towards further heaven, hers and his,
intertwined like the branches of a tree-
the tree of the knowledge of good
and evil became a distant memory
as his tongue worshiped her.
Comments (27)
Excellent.
A night off from being a mommy does you good, girl!
goodness sakes! is it hot in here or…;) that is one serious birthday poem, to your adam’s woman.
@Bels_Kaylar - i’m sorry you don’t know her. she’s a lovely (dirty-minded) woman
@songoftheheart - there was no question about that.
@ZSA_MD - thank you.
Sultry words of love. Decadent and delightful. I think I may need a cool shower, but will blame it on the muggy hot evening we are having.
oh my. yes she will definitely love this.
well done
Sexy and sweet, just like the apple
Well done, dear.
@MzSilver - of course.
@bonmots - i hope so.
@BoulderChristina - i miss her hanging around here.
Oh wow. beautifully written. very intense. I liked it.
yeowza.
Wow. That was not at all the bible story I recall. Excuse me I must fan myself and maybe take a cold shower now. Well done.
Well done.
Looks like I can’t follow up this fine example of erotica. Someone has been studying this type of writing pretty well…..
I’m getting a beer and going to my room to blush.
I’m with @UncCharlie on this one. Heck, I may even take a cold shower but not with the Unc of course, alone…
@promisesunshine - i used to see her, out and about, on xanga, but she’s disappeared. or as some of us do, taken another name. s’alright.
She would like. I miss her also. We keep in touch through email.
@armnatmom - i sent it to her. but haven’t heard back. hope she’s having a great weekend.
@vexations - sorry it has to be alone.
@UncCharlie - oops. didn’t mean to make anyone blush.
@PPhilip - i used to read a lot of romance novels.
@Grannys_Place - thanks.
@leaflesstree - not the bible story i recall. that made me laugh.
@plantinthewindow - did you dig it?
@promisesunshine - Great minds think alike. I sent it to her also.
She’ll get double the wishes…
@armnatmom - sweet of you to think of it. i can’t see her complaining about reading it twice.
excellent work
Erotic love always gets our attention and you wrote to that beautifully.
@godfatherofgreenbay - thanks
@ANVRSADDAY - thank you.
The last six lines . . . powerful, provocative, and creative. I know, I commented twice!
@vexations - you can comment as many times as you like. especially when you use polysyllabic words like those.
absolutely luscious ! I am glad I finally followed those shoes home
@Blue_Moon1 - well hello. glad you liked it.