January 30, 2012
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#WinterSH26 song
Write something incorporating the clause (as a sentence or otherwise), “A silver splash, like an exotic fin, cut the lamplight, a form both receding into the shadows and looming closer.”
She sits atop her tower of stone, lonely and Forgotten, like every woman scorned. Alone. Silent. Without purpose. From far away, she spies a silver splash, like an exotic fin. Hope springs to her breast, song builds within her. The song breaks free: beautiful, melancholy. The boatmen, mesmerized by the soulful tune, Wishing to see her more clearly illumined by the moon Cut the lamplight, turn their vessel To follow the sound and view the shining visage- A form both as beautiful and dangerous as her song: Shining hair, fair face, as curvaceous as the sea itself. The men draw ever closer, as men do: Spying only the beauty without, never the pain within. Her song, less joyful, receding into the shadows, As forgotten as her heart, broken by shallow men. And these new men, perhaps innocent, Are looming closer.(continuing to spew. almost done with scavenger hunt)
i’d never heard this one- a combo of bizarre and peaceful.
Comments (12)
And here I thought we were going to hear you sing. You do a great job with the prompts, and paint a vivid picture here.
superb
@songoftheheart - uh. no. don’t have the guts for that. @lanney - thank you.
Wow, vivid and powerful. That was a difficult challenge and I admire how you handled it. Interesting view of gender relationships. Women usually do think they understand men and that they, as women, are misunderstood. I think perhaps they are correct. Men usually admit they can’t fathom the female but still pursue them. Enjoy your day.
yes, indeed….. you did a wonderful job with this.
@vexations - we’re all incomprehensible.
thanks. @roscoes_farm - tanku
great work
@godfatherofgreenbay - thank you
Very well written. I like.
@Grannys_Place - thanks. glad you folks are ok.
I love seeing what you’ve come up with after reading the prompt!
I’ve actually been thinking a lot the past week about something you’ve touched on here…that few people take the time to (or want to) really see “the pain within”. Maybe that’s why so many of us keep it hidden.
Great poem, MySweet!
HUGS!
@AdamsWomanFell - hug. sweet lady. i see lots of pain and emptiness. the kind i talk about is fake.