January 9, 2013
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it bites
# winsh 2. Write a poem entitled “Dog Bite”. 3pts
puncture deep in the seat of the problem
massive storm cloud reveals a
demon inside spewing the savagery
that can only happen on a day
when nice is only a color
and hope is a flammable twig
that burns up fast and smelly
so much barking about what is deserved
and how your rights are bigger than mine
and what you say is more important
and taking one for the team.
the team is a pain in my ass.I had a dream last night that told me I was angry. So I stayed good and angry all day long. I’m angry about a lot of things, some of them are even real. Some fun things I considered today in my fit of temper: 1) my Christmas tree was a fire hazard and could have been very entertaining for a little while had I lit it rather than taking it to the curb. 2) it’s a good thing we don’t have any equipment that goes “boom” because I had a powerful need for target practice today. 3) it is so darn annoying that I have to juggle other people’s crap when I need a nap. 4) some times certain words are more attractive than other times.
ps. i know it’s garbage.
Comments (32)
Solution: Target practice that old Christmas tree that has everyone’s crap under it, say Rumpelstiltskin three times, then take a nap. I like your poetry
it’s difficult when being a mommy comes before being a woman, or before being a person. every single second of every day.
yes?
(hugs)
good poem, Carrie.
@plantinthewindow - that must be what is bringing me down today, because your comment made me cry. thanks for the hugs.
in fact. i think i will do that right now.
@BoulderChristina - i could throw snowballs at it. and speak french to it.
reccing the f out of this b/c it makes total sense
@lanney - that’s the french i know.
hugs all around.
@promisesunshine - just last night I read where someone said a similar thing, and it seemed to ring true, here.
yeah, some days are like that and I really like the visual of your tree in flames (curbside, of course)
Anger can be very useful – just don’t hurt anyone, including yourself.
Love the poem.
xxoo
Maybe you could get so angry you throw the tree to the curb instead of dragging it? I sometimes wake up with feelings left over from vivid dreams. It’s distracting even if it was a good dream because life is not as good as my good dreams and then I’m sad. Also dream emotions are more powerful.
Throwing the tree might help prevent you from expressing your anger more violently toward other humans. And it would tire you out so you could take a long nap.
no garbage at all, I like the poem a lot, very true.
not garbage at all.
now i sure hope you dont dream about being told to do some very bad things.
There are no good or bad feelings- they just represent things that are going on in your life, and it’s better to acknowledge good and bad alike.
Just a hug…
this brought back memories of a time a dog bit me
No one said being a grown-up was going to be fun… Sounds like you need some “me time”. Time for a six pack of good beer and whatever comfort food is handy. Or a nice long hike/walk. As long as you get that “me time”…
Nice poem. I’m sorry you were having a bad day. Hope it all perks up for you soon.
@SandraErickson - anger is not one of my favorite emotions. but it’s great for poetry.
@leaflesstree - very glad i was dream free last night. i may drag the tree back to the fire pit. could be entertaining.
@meddwl - thanks, nadia.
@buddy71 - me too. but don’t you think i could choose not to listen to the voices?
@RighteousBruin - you are right, of course. but i still have a weird desire to sing debby boone. woah woah woah.
@moniet - i appreciate that. thank you.
@godfatherofgreenbay - in the ass?
@Zoz36 - i seem to need a lot of me time right now. maybe a month would satisfy me.
@armnatmom - thanks.
I think there’s a prompt having to do with writing about something that made you angry. I’m pretty sure. It leapt off the page right into my eye. Have I mentioned I seem to have gotten over my anger problem?? It’s weird, right? Like, now I can’t remember what I was so angry about anymore.
ha – I talked to Oscar the Grouch and he said this poem wouldn’t fit in his crib
you don’t need equipment that goes boom, just throw rocks, rocks aren’t controversial and there lots of them just for the taking!
@ordinarybutloud - oh, i saw it. i have no doubt that i’ll be able to use that.
@mlbncsga - how about snowballs? i have no rocks.
I am very high on your poem! Especially strong and solid work.
I wuz on da nooz!
like!
You took your emotions and put them to words. Not garbage.
oxooooooooooooo now, that’s poetry! not that we want a repeat of what created it, or anything
Okay. Now go and take a nap. It’ll all be better when you’re freshly rested.
I give you more than 3 pts, sister. You’ve just described the FSA.
@promisesunshine - snowballs work great!
@Kellsbella - which is?
@Ampbreia - I suppose you are correct about that.
@Bels_Kaylar - currently crank free. yay.
@songoftheheart - thank you, jo.
@vexations - sorry about putting the team in there. (b)
@promisesunshine - The Free Sh*t Army.
@Kellsbella - ah. yes. i know them.
It is obvious you suffer from the same problem I do – we are not good judges of our own work… this was good – packed with powerful imagery and emotion!