March 12, 2013

  • confused

    #winsh 4. Write a poem entitled “Sea Water.”

    sea water
     
    a water goddess from the sea
    uncertain of where she should be
    against the rocks, she splashes
    shards split as her will crashes
    gently falls upon the sand
    solid shoreline takes her hand
    destination still mystery
    a water goddess from the sea

    This was supposed to be an octelle. Interesting in that it’s a made-up poetry form (which I suppose they all are) and that I actually misinterpreted my notes.  Darn it.  Anyhow.  It’s an aabbccaa rhyming pattern, with 88777788 syllable count, with personification and metaphor and junk.  The first two and last two are supposed to be identical. Obviously I thought it was first and last only.  So sue me.


    The sign project: Confused

    What I’ve noticed:

    I don’t appear to want to reveal my mood.  The back of that cardboard is white, I’m deliberately using the brown side.  I hid my word in amongst all that curly color.  What is the point of wearing a sign if it’s not immediately clear what it says.  I find that curious.

    People are cool with my signs.  I had two people tell me today that they wished they had my “really sleepy” sign.  I had another person tell me that she is thinking of doing signs too.  I did have someone ask if I had the same mood all day.  Luckily today and yesterday, my signs have quite adequately represented me.  I’m hopeful that I’ll be more moody later this week. (Really I’m saying I hope I’m less tired and confused.)  Also, kids are very cool with them.  I had some wish out loud that they could have them or wonder if this was a project we’d be doing later.  Good idea, I must say.  I will have to ponder that.

    Still got hugs.

    Didn’t feel so silly wearing it and I was out and about far longer today than yesterday.

Comments (19)

  • I like the sign. It reminds me of the sunshiny rainbow thing you used to have as your picture. And I like the poem, it’s mystical-y. :)

  • the poem is lovely. reminds me of someone’s painting ;)  

    the sign experiment. sweet to hear people’s reactions. especially the kid people.

  • great poem and I like that sign, it does say “confused” properly

  • oh lol.  your t-shirt business is assured :D   fine poem never mind the suit.

  • The poem would make a good rap.  I wouldn’t have the slightest idea what an octelle even is, if you hadn’t told us.

  • this is neat, your sign thing.  my sign is weird.

    yes, it would make a good rap!  I agree with Gary.  

  • I think it’s a beautiful poem.  It’s lovely.  Unlike the gentlemen, I don’t hear it as rap.  It sounds like a confused sea goddess.  Is she wearing a sign of shells? 

    So what did I miss about this sign project?  Is this a personal project, or a project for something else?  And a confused person is not easily read, so your writing the word on the brown side with all those scribbles is really a perfect confused sign. 

    ((((hugs))))

  • Your poem is so beautiful…I give it 10 Sighs.

    It’s fun to read of you and JR’s sign progress.

    If I wore a mood sign, it would say the same mood every day. And I might get in trouble.

    HUGS!!!

  • Like your sea water. You and Jr are brave to show the world your moods around your neck. I think I’ll just shout my current mood out.

  • Love that poem. Short, concise and flows beautifully.

    “Eventually all the pieces fall into place. Until then, laugh at the confusion, live for the moment, and know that everything happens for a reason”  The title of your post reminded me of that quote, so thank you for that, as well!

    @adamswomanback - lol, your comments are just awesome.

  • @songoftheheart - clog’s cute vlog about it is here.  In a comment conversation on my post “what it looks like”, the two of us decided to wear signs for a week telling about our mood to see what happens. 
    @armnatmom - i think my mood is generally pretty obvious.  ;)
    @nov_way - that is a wonderful quote. thank you for sharing. 
    @adamswomanback - i WON’T be wearing that sign.  even if it’s true.   this is fun.
    @plantinthewindow - my sign says weird too.  it just says it with sharpies and cardboard.
    @RighteousBruin - and your life was pretty good without that info.  i’m going through the list i wrote down in my “journal” last year of all kinds of interesting poetry forms.
    @starmanjones - i have an excellent collection of t-shirts
    @godfatherofgreenbay - cool.  :)
    @leaflesstree - i like it too. 

  • @Bels_Kaylar - yes. there is a great deal of influence in this poem.  that’s just where it went.

  • Good job on the poem! You are braver than I. Love the sign project idea.

  • that’s a great poem, I don’t know anything about octelle’s but I do know I really need your sleepy sign today…zzzzzzz 

  • Lovely poem.  Makes me want to go to the beach.  If I wore a sign I suppose it would have to say “snarky” most of the time. *sigh*

  • @BubblesLarue25 - and that is how i love you best.  :)
    @mlbncsga - and tomorrow is another day for that sign. since i can’t sleep tonight. again.

  • I have enjoyed reading from eating glass to the complex poetry which is way harder to write than just free hand which is about my speed these days.  You are also very artistic which makes me feel a little envious, for I can write a book, but I cannot draw a stick figure that would impress anyone.   I have ET, no joke, an abbreviation for Essential Tremor, but it is relatively controlled with proper medication.  Without the meds, I would speak more similarly to Katherine Hepburn in her later years;  What a great woman and terrific actress!

    Yes, one can get all sorts of opinions on Xanga, and with some, I do bother to respond, but you are correct;  We are all different, and no matter what anyone says, people my age usually are adaptable in many ways, but in others, we have minimal tolerance, and with no apologies, because many of us were raised in strict homes and were very value conscious, and I freely admit that, “Anything goes,” is not fully acceptable in or from a Judeo/Christian background.  We cannot make ourselves rewrite almost six milleniums of sacred script.  I mean that took some doing to get all of those chapters and verse on goat skin, and few have appreciation for how much the scholars have gone through to interpret all of this in to what became a guide for some of us to live by.

    We are not prudish, but we get that some danger and very serious thought and risk of death got these books out to us, and I would be certain people feel as passionately about the Quran, and I am embarrassed to say that I do not know what The Budda left us as written word, but in most cultures, there are glasses which are not to be broken.

    I am very sad to tell you that I have had patients who did eat glass by accident, and it is terribly painful, dangerous, and usually winds up in GI bleed, for it cannot just past through the digestive system as smooth or shaped small objects can.  Our former secretary of state, Madeline Albright, to my memory wound up hospitalized once and crushed glass had accidentally gotten in some meal which, I believe, she ate on an airplane.

    I did want to share with you, I must have made myself unclear, I wrote a book using Xanga, but I did not write a book about Xanga, and there was really a spirit of generosity as I would make the entries, and then when the book  was published;  I had to go back and delete all but bits of it from Xanga.  “Pinkhoneysuckle,”  has brought me two awards, and the first in Hollywood was the exciting one.  I will be doing a book show before I leave San Francisco, just down the hillls from us in our area which widely is known as Noe Valley, but of the micro climates we have here;  Our hill is as good as it gets for San Francisco.  I had planned to come on in to Ohio, but this is a neighborhood group of writers, one I met in Hollywood will probably be there, so I do not expect to make a lot of sales, but it is good to get the message out about the Appalachian Diaspora of mid-century.  West of the Rocky Mountain people seem to know less about our East and mid-Atlantic states and what went on there.  California, like Texas, tends more to function like a country within a country as far as getting history out there.  That is how I view things with a bird’s eye view of both areas as well as having lived in Washington, D.C..  I just wanted to not confuse you and to tell you that you have special gifts.

    Blessings, Barbara Everett Heintz

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