October 31, 2012
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gravity’s echo
#whimsh all righty then. you’re lucky i didn’t try to throw in socks and death.
59. Write a POEM about your mother.
48. Write a POEM entitled ” Gravity’s Echo”
41. Write SOMETHING using the line ” Everything leaves a husk.”
29. Write a POEM using the following words: seed-pod, toes, dragon, syrup, membrane, ice
58. Write a POEM using the words zenith, ash, tiger lilies, breath, membrane, map.
Gravity’s Echo
As inevitable as gravity, the passage of time Mother aging, relationship must change. A membrane, delicate as ice. cold. hard. On top of thousands of slights felt For years beyond their need. To this day she doesn’t know about green beans- Those seed-pods turn to unpalatable glob of ash Of how can you not know what your daughter dislikes. The dragon of jealousy and non-forgiveness. She did what she could as all mothers do. Syrup on pancakes, dripping off and soaking in, Sometimes the sweetness to the other Waves as tiger lilies on a sultry August evening And sometimes it’s the hot breath Of the unfeeling sun at its zenith. But then there was the strike of age That made me see the future map And I know that I am wrong to my toes- That I must be the one to mend the membrane Make it warm and strong because someday I will know that everything leaves a husk. The echo of intention replaces the Loud thud of what was perceived
Comments (26)
Well that was interesting, and no mention of anything naughty. HMMMM, Are you feeling ok dear? hehehe
I’m impressed you can kick that much ass at perception and poetry this early in the morning.
@lanney - i’ve got grape eating orcs on my side.
@olwd - i’m not ALWAYS naughty.
What a nice job of pulling all those prompts together and weaving in some great lines…”wrong to the toes” is one example that rocks with me. The ending is solid and sends a clear message of feeling rejected.
@promisesunshine - hehe, uhhhh yea, ok dear. hehe *snickers* BWAHAHAHAHAHA, Hey it’s not April Fools today!!!
You did a great job tying all those prompts together. I’ve been struggling with them individually.
I’m sure poetry would kick my ass anytime of the day @lanney.
Oh, my but this hits the mark “right to the toes” Perception is EVERYTHING. and in my reality this poem rocks the casbah.
WONDERFUL!
That was a very good one, and you have used all the words.
you knock my socks off, baby
so i thought i’d give you a shoe to paint
this is wonderful, especially that kickin’ last line.
Good, consistent imagery.
Perhaps I will write some halloween limericks for you,.
Because I cannot write real poetry like this.
@Thatslifekid - i love limericks. i tried to write one yesterday (or maybe it was this morning) and couldn’t. so i hope you did.
@ascultafili - thank you. i appreciate your visit and the rec.
@Bels_Kaylar - just takes a deadline, i guess. now i have to write a bunch of freaking haiku.
@angys_coco - thank you
@SandraErickson - thank you so much.
@chronic_masticator - i’ve been struggling for months.
@vexations - thanks.
wow. that was cool. I never considered combining the prompts like that, but I like it. However, after she reads this poem she’ll know how you feel about green beans.
@Crystalinne - my mom will never read this poem. but i am going to call her. we probably won’t talk about green beans.
great poem. the last two lines are sublime.
@complicatedlight - thank you, phil.
She keeps feeding you greenbeans on the outside chance that one day you will begin to like them!
I can so relate, as a mother
I really like this
@Aloysius_son - perhaps. (it’s not going to happen)
@bonmots - thanks. that means a lot.
Wow. I’m impressed.
@songoftheheart - thanks, jo
Well done and I like.
Just one word.
Amazing.
you are so talented, are you published yet?
@godfatherofgreenbay - best compliment ever. not yet. i have one poem out there trying to find a mag.
@ZSA_MD - zakiah, that is a very nice word.
@Grannys_Place - thanks.