April 8, 2012
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dream house
npm day 8 and bluemooncat enormous thing 15. ekphrastic poem
Dream House
she stands wistfully behind the fence
that guards the dream house-
but not guarding at all
the dream house is there
for anyone
closes her eyes
a buzzing sound comes from her wings
open eyes again
thinking
what wings
yet the dream house
bright ribbons swirling about
can she touch the ribbons
as they come ever closer
too slippery to grab
alluring dream house
key dangles just outside her reason
the verdant maze will lead her
calculate, regulate, obfuscate
elusive dream house
no
not that part of her mind
closes her eyes again
wings buzzing as they carry her
down
away
into
the intricate path of sharp yet soft bushes
darkness keeps her vision clear
her feet follow the path
knowing the way to the dream house.
“Dream House” dreamy painting by @longshadow618
Comments (24)
That is some dream house. I don’t know what my dream house would look, but it would be in Hawaii, overlooking the beach, many windows, and an interior open garden.
Love your writing.
frank
Yep, this one will be popular too. : )
@ANVRSADDAY - thank you, frank. i got the memo about hawaii.
i think this is a different kind of dream house.
@lanney - you’re sweet.
nice. well done. you paired it well with the Edster’s painting.
@plantinthewindow - i could write a hundred million things about that painting. how does edster feel about “edster”?
@promisesunshine - I’m too far away for him to body slam me, so I just said it without consulting him.
I don’t think that is my dream house. Too many stairs. Unless it has an elevator.
I really like the part of the poem that says “what wings?” Reminds me of a dream where it all makes perfect sense until I regain consciousness. Oh well.
@leaflesstree - your dreams have whatever you want in them. i’m thinking.
@plantinthewindow - you’re a rebel.
Kind of a town house dream home….. good poem.
@promisesunshine - yes, it’s just odd because sometimes i don’t know what I want until there it is. wow.
most lovely. i love the blend and your words always take me there.
Quite the pair, you and Ed!
very nice
I want a dream house like this.
We each make our own dream house and mine is the tiny apt I’m in now. It has taken almost 68 years, but here I am. And what an adventure it has been!
@songoftheheart - i love that painting.
@be_the_rain -
@godfatherofgreenbay - thanks
@BoulderChristina - isn’t it a wonderful place?
@MzSilver - our dreams can take us anywhere. i’m glad you’re happy in your well-decorated apartment. your peace there shows.
Very clever in composition. Great imagery.
“bright ribbons swirling about
can she touch the ribbonsas they come ever closertoo slippery to grab”Your creativity is showing…..goody.
See? Told ya.
@lanney -
@vexations - did you have a nice trip?
@ZSA_MD - you are so very nice.
Awesome poem and an amazing painting!
@Aloysius_son - thanks. go visit the painterman. in his photos are some other amazing things.
@promisesunshine - I just did… and subscribed. I do like his stuff, big time!
@Aloysius_son - you creative types need to hang out. i hope he returns the favor. i think he’d really like that sunrise with the cross.