March 22, 2012
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sonata memory
bluemooncat enormous thing. pretty much micro story using the following words: sonata, cork, algae, ribbons, bone, sober, Year of the Dragon
He was born in the Year of the Dragon, had been far around the block, down the road and back, to infinity and beyond, and found himself in a space and time that suited him just fine. A little more solitary maybe than he’d planned in his youth. His workaday life a little different than the path he’d chosen. Nonetheless, a life that was what it was and more than enough of everything good most days.
This day was one of those days. He found himself sitting by the lake, ribbons of algae hiding plentiful fish, cat-n-nine tails dividing the bull from the frog. Sun setting gently in front of him, cascading pinks and oranges, as he contemplated just how sober he needed to be.
In his mind, a sunny, dark-haired, green-eyed girl played a sonata by Mozart. Her fingers flying over the piano keys, the same sure, sweet way that she’d played him long ago. He closed his eyes letting the memories float in his mind like cork on the lake.
His eyes still closed, he could feel her in his bones, could feel her thinking about him. Felt her so close that he could almost smell her skin, could almost sense her breath against his face. Stronger than a memory, his lips were pressed against softness more now than then.
Comments (44)
This made me think of Mark. LOL!
that last paragraph…..i’m gone to think about it. no wait, not think anymore. just feel it. the stuff in his bones.
are those your shoes?
I like it
mmmmmm.. nicely visual.
I am so impressed you are doing this. You are REALLY doing it! You are awesome. I am not even going to attempt it.
That last paragraph is so darn sensual. You seem to have a good idea of how a man thinks!
This is awesome writing!
@vexations - is it all that different from how a woman thinks? i feel like doing a survey. ha.
@ordinarybutloud - because i’m too chicken to write anything longer.
@godfatherofgreenbay - @xOne_twentyX - thanks.
@songoftheheart - Me too!!! I just thought I was being big headed.
Sigh. Alas, no dark haired green-eyed girl to pine for. Or fish, for that matter. Plenty of solitude, though.
@promisesunshine - You wrote about fishing! Yay! I mean, sorry.
Nice writing.
@songoftheheart - also, I have a seriously bad habit of thinking EVERYTHING is about me. hahah sigh
nice!
@distractedbyzombies - he wasn’t catching them! (it’s not the fish themselves i have issues with.)
well, if you really want it to be about you, just go ahead and think so. (are you a dragon? not that it matters, since it’s all leah’s fault anyhow)
@songoftheheart - perhaps it’s universal?
@anvilsandedelweiss - i think it’s too short. thoughts?
@promisesunshine - mark was born in the year of the dragon. but it’s not my fault. his parents had too much to drink and the moon was particularly lovely that night. i was only 6 weeks in the womb at the time. i can hardly be blamed.
I don’t necessarily think it’s too short, unless you think there’s more to add to it. it could certainly be longer but I don’t think it’s lacking .
@anvilsandedelweiss - #1. you picked year of the dragon, so it’s your fault. #2 are you seriously in your mid-30′s and complaining about being middle-aged. gah. shut the freak up. leave the whining to the old farts.
ok, thanks for input. i’m still afraid to write anything with any kind of length. i think it should be a goal for this year.
@promisesunshine - heh. if life expectancy is 80ish, I am nearing middle age. All my birthday cards said so. i’m only mildly concerned about my lack of retirement funds, though.
writing things of length is scary. and painful. it makes a good goal that way.
@anvilsandedelweiss - i had no idea life expectancy was 80. i was counting on closer to 90. too short as it is. in any case, sorry. it seems i might be awful this evening. unintentionally.
@promisesunshine - ha. i think it is 76 for men and 80 for women. i read it on the bullentin board at the doctors office.
@anvilsandedelweiss - 81. we need that extra year.
gosh. that’s depressing. ok. that’ll do me for reality this evening. yuck.
@promisesunshine - well even middle age isn’t close to that. it’s like waking up at 2 in the morning still knowing there’s lots of good sleep before the alarm goes off.
I’m there.
@onestepcloserto_perfection - at the lake?
@anvilsandedelweiss - true enough.
@onestepcloserto_perfection - or at hunger games?
@promisesunshine - Yes’m. Dragon here.
@anvilsandedelweiss - Don’t worry about the retirement funds. After the next good crash, we’ll all be even again. It’ll be like a jubilee year.
@anvilsandedelweiss - Don’t try to deny it. You were a crafty fetus.
@distractedbyzombies - well, then go fishing and leave the pianist alone.
@promisesunshine - But she has dark hair and green eyes! Who could resist?
@distractedbyzombies - she’s not really that good at piano. and she’s middle-aged.
@promisesunshine - yikes! hows her credit rating?
@distractedbyzombies - and if that doesn’t work, at least i am halfway to death ! It’s true. I knew I’d want you to be my friend some day so I got your parents liquored up and put on some Barry White on the Pan Handle all the way from my mother’s uterus, probably while she was in an art studio in a little wooded island in Mineeeesoda listening to Jerry Jeff Walker and smoking Benson and Hedges Menthol lights with little concern for my pending birth weight. The seventies were totally magic like that. So really you should thank me for your existence. And before you ask, no, i am only on my first glass.
@distractedbyzombies - you do not want to know.
@anvilsandedelweiss - how big is the glass?
@promisesunshine - it’s just a red solo cup, but my neighbor made it, so i am not sure what all is in it. tasty though
I read this before, but I came back to listen to the music (it wouldn’t work on my phone
). I like. I can never write concisely and briefly, I tend to ramble even in comments. I like this. I like your concise and brief style.
@anvilsandedelweiss - red solo cup. snort.
@leaflesstree - my concise style annoys me. because i’m not. (perhaps you’ve noticed on my comments to you)
@anvilsandedelweiss - I knew it! Not about the first glass. I suspected many more on that count. Aw. That was cute. Keep drankin’.
@promisesunshine - Long-windedness can be a virtue and a blessing, I suppose.
@promisesunshine - it really is. our town got a Dollar General ( i live in a very very very small town) and i bought them at the grand opening to celebrate.
@distractedbyzombies - it really is cute, the story of how i made you get born. I take absolutely no responsibility for your brother though. heh.
@anvilsandedelweiss - i believes you. red solo cups are the best kind of celebrating equipment. all i got is bottles.
@anvilsandedelweiss - Wise decision.
That would have taken some major preincarnate mojo, besides.
@promisesunshine - Well…right now I AM in District 12. And I was at the lake while reading it.
@onestepcloserto_perfection - it’s been days. and you are just now finishing?? slacker.
@promisesunshine - Nononoonono. I finished on Saturday and went and saw the movie. So good. I’m currently in West Virginia…which is part of District 12.
Duh.
@onestepcloserto_perfection - duh is my middle name tonight. almost heaven. west virginia. blue ridge mountains, shenandoah river. used to know all those words. but you probably have no idea what the heck i am talking about. which is fine. clearly, i have no clue either.
@promisesunshine - I DO know what they mean. =P I love it here. Never ever ever want to leave. Sad that Friday is going to be the last day here. =(